Hmm... It's reaaalllyyy getting under my skin, how Eric is so open about his infatuation. I am seriously becoming frustrated, but you have me holding on to every word.
This is usually where people express there love/hate with this story. Remember one thing and that is Ava doesn't feel the same way. She is too much in love with her shifter man. You will have to read on to see what happens. After this story is Newly Dead. Everything then goes to Ava's POV in that one.
Tonight there is an idependent film on PBS's Independent Lens about my hometown called 45365. Whenever you get to Newly Dead, Ava and Joe go back home and their hometown is my hometown. If you want a visual, just google on because some of my descriptions are pretty vague.
Thank you so much again for reading my stuff, V. I'm hoping to read some more D.P. soon. I hope I don't frustrate you much longer with this story!!! ;)
Oh wow. How oh how did I know that her ass was going to find a way out of there? I'm really concerned; Eric - everyone - seems to have a lot on his plate. How will Sookie explain all of this to him? I hope that he takes it well. And poor Sookie - dealing with all this, almost by herself. Eric doesn't even realize what he's doing to her in subconsciously loving Ava. Oh my. (sigh)
Awww, finally!! So sweet, their reuinion! I wish there was more. ;-) I cannot beleve how Eric bought Ava a gift... his heart is so conflicted. It is really hard to watch!
I saw that you said you won't be on here much? =( but I miss your words on my story so much!
I am sorry, sweetheart. You know how the holiday rush is. I hate being away, but I'll still get on to validate. Hopefully after I get my christmas cards done and sent out, I'll find some time. My family is celebrating a week early this year. So maybe I'll be able to leave a few christmas presents under your tree ;) Till then, I'll try to find some time to take care of validation. I enjoy reading your words as well and I give you lots of love and many great reviews!!!!
Awww... Poor Sam. I did think it was sweet how they felt for one another. Ava needed this. She needed someone to bring her comfort, and Sam did that. It's kinda sad that he's alway so alone... Eric is gonna be crushed. I hope he can let go of her, but knowing from the other story that he hasn't - that he can't - ... I wonder how he will treat Sookie?
Sorry I've been distant, I've been so uncompassed with writing, but I did not forget about this story at all! I love the plot, and I am eager to continue. Are you on Twitter?
It's all good, Virgo! I will probably staying away for a while, except to validate new stories. Holidays are a busy time for me. I'm not on twitter, but I do have an account over at fanfiction.net. I'm VikingGirl74 over there. You can get a hold of me through there usually. I don't know if you ever had a chance to explore that site, but it does have a lot of SVM and True Blood fanfiction. Some of which are pretty darn good.
As far as Sam goes, in some way I wish Sookie would come to her senses with that man. Yeah, I love her and Eric together, but I don't see Sookie getting turned to be with him. The two I root for are Sam and Eric. I'm a total Bill hater. I just don't like the way he treats her. Anyway, thank you so much for the read and the input! Keep on, keeping on! :)
Wow! She can speak now! Joe has always been her net of safety, so of course she would open up for him, just as Eric does the same with Sookie. Oh my, I am very afraid to see how Eric will handle this when he finds out... I'm really nervous for Sookie.
Yeah, poor Sookie has her hands full. Wait till Eric gets his first glimpse of Joe. Ava is not afraid of Eric and is always there to remind him that she is not the same person or the person he wants he to be. She puts him in his place as the story goes on. As I've said before, there is a love/hate thing going on with the readers of this story. Some think I focus on Ava more than I do Sookie. I don't know. As I've also said before, I plan on doing a whole revamp whenever I get time. Thank you for hanging in there with me!
Damn, Eric! You call and the first thing you ask your "Wife" about is the woman who looks like your first wife?? Tisk tisk, honey! He is so tangled, he doesn't know what to do. And this love he has for her lasts all the way to the story I began, hen Ava has grown old and had kids? OOHHHH!! Smh. Great work!
Hey, no problem!! Everyone has a strong point, and if yours is drama, then that is your specialty. It took me a long time to fall into comfort with creating explicit, detailed smut. You should do a relationship one shot to this series involving Eric and Sookie for practice. I'd love to read it! My eyes are getting heavy; I'll finish up tomorrow. =) Good night, VG!
Goodnight!!! Wish you some good old Viking dreams!!! ;)
This story is so deeply rooted with drama and I love it! I'm ready for some ES action though. Hopefully in the next chapter?
Be honest, I better at drama than smut. It's actually kind of PG-13. I really want so much to improve this story. I don't work with a Beta reader, which I probably should. I do love writing smart ass characters with real feelings. I noticed improvements in my writing since this story. This story has good bones. I just need to gloss it up a bit, but I don't think it's too bad for my first time out. Thank you so much again, Virgo!!!!
Is that his office door that only opens from the outside? Strange...
I love Ava. I cannot wait until she starts speaking again. Eric cares for her so much. When she meets Joe, I wonder how he will respond...
Your Tara is so on point. And when you write about Eric walking into the bar, I always feel like I can just see him swaggering in, capturing all the attention. God I love Eric!! I love ho he reaches out to Sookie to assure her that he still loves and wants her, though he is having very evident internal struggles with his feelings for Ava. Great chapter!
"How are my two girls," Eric asks in an almost human way. "This vampire is not very good at mimicking emotions. How long has he been trying to mainstream," Ava broadcasted and I giggled.
Lmao!!! That cracks me up. Really, Eric, you gigantic Viking. Trying to be all sweet. God I love him!!
It really, really, REALLY bothers me that he has feelings for Ava. I know he can't help it, but gosh! It stings!! I was comforted to see him tell her that they still belong to each other. Geeze, I feel like I am Sookie! Hahaha! Great chapter! A lot of emotion! I can't wait to finish this!!
It is so sweet to see Sookie and Ava bonding. It tickles me that they are so sisterly so soon. Maybe because I have seen the future already. I love this story, VG. Seriously. I wish I could read faster to see where it all goes between now and the last story I got a peek of.
Your too kind, Virgo (blush) This is where it all begins. I like to think that Sookie can be a bit less hot headed when it comes to dealing with someone in Ava's position. I know I would do my best to extend the olive branch. I know it's hard to read and write stories, so take your time. I myself, like to read all the stories that comes through, but sometimes there is not enough hours in the day or life gets in the way. Thank you so much again for all the kind words! Even on this old story ;)
This is so touching. I wonder why she reminds him so much of Aude! Those dreams do something to me; it's like the family is reunited. Hmm... I'm anxious to see where this goes!
It'll take a few turns. I hope you forgive my spelling and language. Thank you for reading, Virgo!!!
OH MY EFFING GOODNESS!!
I did not see that coming, VG!! Did NOT! Ahhh! His wife?! Come on, it cannot be. What is about to happen??
You'll have to read on my dear. Things may not always be as they seem. By the way, I used my physical description when creating Ava, except I'm probably not as sexy. I am pretty darn curvy though. Nothing like Viking fantasies.
OMFG, Let the Right One in was my SHIT!!!!
Ok, back to the story haha! I just had to insert that on in there. Best vampire movie I ever saw.
Saw it and read the book! Totally want to see what they did with the American version. I recommend you pick up the book. It goes into more detail. Who needs Edward Cullen? Not I!!!!!
Awww, Jase. I love these guys!! It's so powerful, the humanising affects Sookie has on Eric. Love them!
Wow. This chapter was amazing. Definitely getting into the depth of the story. It feels like you had some creative growth between this and the first chapter. Maybe that's just me haha. But I am completely drawn in. It aches me to see Eric so vulnerable, however I know he will be ok.
By the way, those last two lines about Eric creaking the floor boards gave SO MUCH imagery! I FELT it! It was so creepy and realistic. All that from two lines smh.
Thank you so much, Virgo!!!! I hope it keeps your interest. As I've said before and if you read my reviews there is a complete love/hate thing going on with this story. Some of the readers feel that I focus of certain characters too much. Maybe I do, after all they are my children.
By the way, doing a hell of a job with your story for not reading the books. Can't wait to read more!!!
MMMMMM!! Those last lines from my husband. Pahaahha! Sorry, I will always get carried away when it comes to Northman. I love that creature. Something in me melts when he gets soft around Sookie. This is interesting. Kinda hard to read the dialogue in paragraphs, but this is well written for your first fic. I definitely approve of the storyline.
Thank you so much, Virgo! As I've said before, I totally plan on revamping this (no pun intended) as soon as the muses quit kicking me. I got three stories going on at once in my head. Posted another one tonight. The first story you have read is A Ghost in Waiting, part of my Dead Remembering series. If you ever get to those, so far I have A Ghost in Waiting, A Shifters Son, A Telepath's Trials and the one I'm presently working on, A Sapling's Sorrows. I also have three non series stories if you are interested. Legally Dead and now Belinda's Song. There is also my super quick read called Supernatural Horror Picture Show.
I'm soooo enjoying your story right now. I look forward to validating it whenever I find it in the box. Thank you so much again. Keep on, keeping on.
So I have come home. Yayy! I read this on my Droid last night, I was so ready to begin. Instant gratification; young Sookie and... same Eric. haha! Knowing how far they've progressed from reading the story I started on (CANNOT think of the name to save me), it is nice to see how they all got to this point. Clearly, she and Eric have just begun their bonding. I'm really drawn into the progression their relationship takes. I am a romantic after a Vampire lover (blush), so I'm watching every move they make.
As far of these Trinity MF's, I am really concerned for Sookie's safety. I don't like that Eric's gotten her involved in this, but he needs her telepathy for his own safety, and that of other Supes. (sigh) Kinda nervous about the next chapter. Good work!
I won't lie when I say this baby could use some improving. This is my very first piece of fanfic ever and one that the readers seem to have a love/hate relationship with. I know I am really thinking about revamping this one ( pardon the pun.)
I also wrote this one on a ten year old Mac and it was giving me hell. I use no beta which I probably should, but on some level I have trust issues when it come to my stories. I do appreciate honesty. In fact I'm a huge fan of it. Thank you so much for your kindness, Virgo! I hope I can keep your interest :)
I liked your story but I was a little disappointed that our heroine Sookie Stackhouse appeared to be weak, submissive to her feelings, & a secondary character. This new character Ava was given so much strength & power over everyone that Sookie just faded into the background! Sookie had no voice and you couldn't even see the similarities between them that was spoken about in this story? If Ava was a bad or jealous person she could have easily taken Eric away from Sookie! I wasn't under the impression that Eric had this great love affair with his dead wife Aude, it was mentioned in Charlaine Harris's world that it was a marriage of convenience and Eric grew to care for her? At any rate I hope to see some more depth to Sookie and not see her as this mute submissive person we see in this story. She has always spoken her mind and we need to see this come back.
This is my very first piece of fanfic. I know it's far from perfect. I have plans to revisit this one and change a few things around. It is not one of my strongest pieces and I'm the first to admit it. I appreciate your honest review. It has given me a few things to think about :)
Read this whole story (part 1) in a day! I enjoyed the story line and your new characters. Have you noticed how hard people find it to successfully wrap up the end of a story? I think you did a top job on this one. It's a good ending but still leaves room for part two (which i'm about to start reading now).
The only bad thing about this story was some bad spelling (but everyone has a bit of that!), and your ? key seems to have been forgotten at times :). Can i say this without causing offense? none is intended. I am, and will only ever be a reader, so maybe i should just shut up! Overall, i loved the story and am looking forward to reading more.
Thank you so much Bvee!!! This is my very first piece of fan fic ever. At the time I wrote this, I did it on my very ancient Mac and it was giving me oddles of troubles. I seriously thought about revisiting that story and a few of my older ones could use some tweaking. I look at it now and see a need to sort of refine it a bit. I take no offense whatsoever to honesty. In fact I welcome it. I'm not afraid to defend my story though. I look back at it and overall I'm pretty proud of it, except for a few parts and grammer mistakes of course. I'm sooooo glad you loved the overall story and thank you for the honest review! I do hope I can keep your attention with my other stories. Thanks for being such an awesome reader, Bvee!!!!
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I loved your characters!!!!! =D They were real and well developed and made the story so much fun!!!! <3 Just a great story overall.
Thank you!!! This was my very first piece. As I've said before, I'm my own worst critic. I hope you get a chance to read the whole series and it's sequel series. I enjoy writing these characters a lot. Some of my inspirations come from myself and people I know. I even use my hometown in the second story. I'm so glad you enjoy my story! I hope to get a chance to read your stuff as well.
I also feel that I would not be able to handle my man acting like that towards another woman but other than that I love this story/series. (I've read them all so far) Anyway, keep up the great work!
I admit there are a few flaws with this story. Any woman would be angry. Hell, I would be, but I would also try and see things from all prospectives. It is not Ava's fault that she makes Eric act this way. When she gets her voice back she lets him know it. I've thought about making improvments to this story for some time now. This is what I love about input and reviews. You can stand back and realize, yeah, I definitely need to make some improvments. This is my very first fanfic piece and it was a write about it as I think about it thing. I'd like to flesh out my characters a little more as well. I'm so glad you enjoy my stories and thank you for the kind words!!!
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I'm sorry but I just can't get through this! In reality- any girl would be upset and hurt by Eric's behavior towards Ava...regardless of if she looks like his dead wife or not. Understanding yeah, but still pissed off and hurt. And there is just no gd way Heidi could have gotten out of there- so dramatic yes but simply not plausable.
And finally, where's the Eric/Sookie nookie?? Are they not dating or something?
great story idea but it just doesn't feel like it all meshes together
I'm sorry you feel that way. I know I could improve on it. This is my first attempt and I'm not what you would call a serious writer. I like to write these for fun. I know there are some holes that need filled in. Maybe down the road I can try and upgrade it a little. To me not every storyline has to involve sex and it can be somewhat trying when you are writing in first person. Even Charliane Harris' novel aren't the most perfect written. I never cared much about giving Sookie a word of the day calender to explain her vocabulary. I myself am a work class zero, just like Sookie I have no college education to speak of, but I do understand big words. Like I said before, maybe down the road I can improve this storyline and give Sookie a little more bite, but she is also feeeling a bit of Eric's confusion and Ava sure tries to hold her own against him too. She even fights with Eric about how he is treating Sookie. Thanks for the constructive criticism. It's always good to have an honest opinion. LOL
What a cute and happy ending. Good job
Thank you so much!!!!!!