I love this story !!!
Thank you VL, so happy you enjoyed it! xo
I enjoyed your viewpoint, but the random and hectic use of the elipses was really distracting. I'm not sure why you needed to use them so much, but it displaced the action so everyone and everything sounded vague and disordered when read aloud.
Thanks for the feedback Ruby. The elipses were merely a grammatic way for me to put in pauses. I see everything visually when I write as if it was a scene. Im aware that it might not be grammatically correct and have since tried to reign in that bad habit. Hopefully you found something to make up for it.
damn that sucks!!! you really should rewrite it so eric takes her virginity.. kind of took the hotness out of the story for the eric and sookie fans :(
Sorry you didnt like it tee, I wanted to try to keep that part of the story close to the books. I think Sookie learns more when she is with Bill first and then Eric. It helps her to appreciate the differences in Eric.
Awesome. Loved it. Ur details with Eric n Sookie complainted relationship is mad. One of the best i read so far.
Thank you Alex, yes they are complicated but deliciously complimentary too. Thanks for the review! xo